A major goal of my current editing is increasing the tension in the book. Re-reading the first couple chapters, it's apparent that there isn't nearly enough fear and suffering in them. It sounds harsh, but without the threat of real pain and difficulty for the characters, there isn't much reason to continue reading.
It's funny how you can "know" something from reading about it, but promptly forget it when the page is in front of you!
- Tension needs to start on the first page. In my case, the world itself presents a lot of dangers--the characters have abilities that they must keep secret from the rest of the "normal" world. A powerful group ruthlessly enforces this secrecy. Prior drafts left a lot of this tension until later, but now it shows up within the first few paragraphs.
- Showing the desperate loneliness of the main character. He starts off the book rather miserable, and although that was present in earlier drafts, a lot of the reasons were (again!) postponed until later in the book. Now that I've started working in bits and pieces sooner, the desire to learn more should be stronger. It's weird, but sometimes giving more information builds mystery more effectively than withholding details.
- How the past affects the present is a major aspect of the book. The characters in my novel are extremely long-lived, and that span of time almost guarantees that any present difficulty has echoes in their past. Knowing the details of what's happened to them and working that information in effectively is crucial to making the reader care about the characters.
Word Delta: ~500, scribbled at the bottom of hand-edited pages